[ CRITIQUES ] :: { idea taken from shunsheng }

[byakuran]

Eh, I'm basically only human, which means I'm liable to make some mistakes on characterization. Especially if it's the first time I'm playing said character. This is why posts like this exist. Feel free to comment & critique me on my interpretation of Byakuran; I'll do my best to listen & take in any advice you might have for me.

Anonymous comments are allowed. Flames are a no go unless they come in the form of red hots. Because, y'know, we're all mature people here. Amirite or amirite?

Hee hee, I said come.

Comments

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

Is "you're a sexy beast" crit? 'cos I feel it needs to be said~.

[pussyfortono]

You're pretty sexy yourself! Way sexier than the B-man here♥

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

Pffft. See, it'll make me sound like a loser if I say I stalk Byakuran, now.

[pussyfortono]

Dude, Byakuran will totally stalk back; he's bossman of the white spell & they're all stalkers at heart.

Among other things.

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

I'll believe it. Mukuro is having quite the conversation with Glo, speaking of 'other things'.

[pussyfortono]

Oh, Glo. He's like an advertisement for badtouch.

GLO XINIA: One & only member of the White spell who's got an arsenal of tentacles to back him up. For four easy payments of Chrome Dokuro, you too can enjoy the benefits of Glo Xinia's hobby.

Riding crop included.

Batteries not.

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

Well, if there's no batteries I feel a bit cheated.

(Also, where does the owl fit in then?)

[pussyfortono]

White Spell needs to make a profit somehow, amirite?

1. pedo molestations
2. ???
3. profit!

( the owl's kind of like a loose variable; sometimes it's there & sometimes it's not. like ketchup in your burger, or the missing pickle they never let you have )

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

For the longest time I thought the uniform included shouta shorts and that would have solved your profit problems like that.

[pussyfortono]

I WISH. Sadly, the most we can do is make the Cervello dress in skimpy white bikinis during the summer.

& sell batteries.

[pussyfortono]

Totally can't forget the batteries.

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

You're the boss, why don't you instigate a uniform change?

Think of all the other things you could use the batteries for.

[pussyfortono]

There are legs in the Millefiore that this boss doesn't want to see.

Gopherchucks?

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

Can't blame you for that.

... well, if that's what floats your boat!

[pussyfortono]

OCRAP. SCHOOL TMR @ 8. I MUST BID YOU ADIEU FOR NOW♥

[anantarika.livejournal.com]

BYE BYE ♥